I had a dream

uff...
I like it, it is good.
A little, small, something is missing. I hope, that you will figure it out pretty soon.

Have fun. And, continue writing.

Till next time, Bye.
:smiles:

wht is missin ...why dun u let me know??? thanks for liking though..tc 

Life is good, there is no option
TMS

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unknownanzel

Hi!

I'm not good at understanding Poems. Specially modern poems.

Not to humiliate you, which I don't. There are formulas, and my brain has been framed in those formulas. And your beautiful words were not in that frame.

Our human brain has been framed in these past generations. Genes has been like that.

Use Formulas like Q/A/Q/A or Q/Q/Q/A or Q/Q/sA/fA etc...

I wish your best performances.
Be a great writer, my wishes are with you.
Bye

simple keta what makes you so sure she's trying to write a poem? Sometimes it's good to think outside the box. You need to be a little more open minded.

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GrgDai

Thanks. I will.
I've calculated. Rechecked few times. But still I can't... so I guessed, it sounds like a modern Poesy.

Started from "had a dream"
finished in "i feel everything gonna be alrite someday...sometime.."

1. No, rhymes.
2. 7 sentences.
3. Complex "Past, Future, present".

Words used:

	alrite
	buy alrite mugs, tshirts and magnets a girl who is not hot, or pretty. Guys just say "shes alrite" so they dont have to say your ugly. Do you like ashley? "shes alrite" by Britney Dec 15, 2003 share this

Deeps
	buy deeps mugs, tshirts and magnets a. meth, dope, shit, shards b. spawning from the metaphore "the deep end", being way into dope, on the slang (sales) 24-7, so deep jail or death is usually the quickest way out. "you got a pipe homey, I got some bomb deeps" drugs dope meth sex mouth hugs by Josh Allen (714 Ca) Jan 19, 2009 share this

Sounds like a  Psy. 70's poesy.

Have a wonderful time.
Bye.

Simple keta has a point, but its borderlining "dead poet society" . My $0.02.

A poem cannnot and should not be judged, unless it is at a poetry contest(such a contest does not make sense nonetheless).

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Hi
khalisisi


Thanks for the words.

You wrote, "A poem cannnot and should not be judged, unless it is at a poetry contest (such a contest does not make sense nonetheless). "
I'll explain.

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Well... I wrote, "I like it, it is good. A little, small, something is missing. I hope, that you will figure it out pretty soon. Have fun. And, continue writing."

unknownanzel asked, "wht is missin ...why dun u let me know??? thanks for liking though..tc"
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grgDai questioned and suggested, "Simple keta what makes you so sure she's trying to write a poem?
Sometimes it's good to think outside the box. You need to be a little
more open minded."
 I answered/explained," Started from "had a dream" | finished in "i feel everything gonna be alrite someday...sometime.."

1. No, rhymes.
2. 7 sentences.
3. Complex "Past, Future, present".
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khalisisi, those were my answers. And, yes poesy shouldn't be judged. I was not judging but answering.

I hope I satisfied your quench.
:)

Have a wonderful time.
Bye.

I know i am not a Poet and i do not think i will be one someday. But, let me tell u , there are free verse points which do not need rhymes. There are 51 types of poetry and all with different forms. That was just  a thought  which was lingering on my mind and i wrote it down. I never thought of writing a perfect poem. Anyway, thanks for ur concern..:))

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unknownanzel
 

Best of luck.
:)
Keep writing. Anything, your dreams, even your monologue.

Have a wonderful time.
Bye.

All I know is - "TIME" - is the best medicine. For some, it takes more, - for others - less, and, for few, they work different. The best thing I have learned after coming to US is that if u cannot change time, then change yourself - slowely and steadily.

I had a dream  too........But mine were I guess very simple........

Thanks Stupida ..for your soothing words..u r right..time heals..yup the more my heart is  breaking, the tougher i am becoming..so no worries..life is wonderful.. everyday i get a chance to learn new thing..should take every situations positively..i am happy for who i am and i am lucky for what i have got..keep on smiling..tc..